Talk:Kakuja/@comment-31.52.172.95-20150601180346/@comment-213.66.199.45-20150601185209

(For the love of..."facepalming")

Kakuja 1: FAIL.

(There´s no such thing such as mindpowers in this series. A kakuja is solely physical and biological, not some piece of magic.)

Kakuja 2: FAIL

(Seriously, this is a ghoul, not a frickin´ Houdini Splicer from Bioshock, Gas form is epic fail immediatly. so´s the rest.)

Kakuja 3: EPIC F-A-I-L!!!!(Tearing my hair here)

This one was the most insulting, unoriginal piece I´ve ever seen for a kakuja or a power in general. Pure OP Sue/stue bullshit.

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Okay, I´ve said my deal with those, here´s some advice for ya´

The Kakuja of Tokyo ghoul isn´t some sort of "Supermode" that turn you into some sort of demi-god.

It doesn´t give you mind powers.

It doesn´t turn you into an angel

It DOESN`T change you from a human being

and it DOESN´T make you so powerful that God becomes your taxidriver...

A kakuja, is just some armor, a "form" in its simplest sense plus some serious stat buffs like "Strength+, Speed+, healing+, agility+ defense+" and that sort of thing. No special powers there besides the basic powers of the base kagune.

That´s all it is.

If you´re really aiming for originality (and not shamelessly ripping off other series and characters as seen above) then my advice, is to make the kakuja´s form based on the personality of your oc, and then base it on an animal or a plant that fits that persona to a T... it doesn´t matter if it´s based on an insect, a flower, a sea-creature, a bird, a mammal, a reptile, a worm or some S&M fantasy, all that it needs, is a decent base for its form and you´re good.

In short: NO SUPERNATURAL POWERS OR ANYTHING LIKE THAT!

This is tokyo ghoul!

Not some dark fantasy fairy tail...

You can find a LOT of decent examples of a kakuja form by just looking through pictures of animals, sea-life or insect world.

(Example: Rinkaku kakuja "Sea anemone", Koukaku Kakuja: "horned lizard", Ukaku kakuja: "Bombardeir-beetle" Bikaku kakuja: "Plague rat" just to mention a few of a endless potential of forms...)

All that matters is that it´s based on the original shape of the kagune your oc got (and please, for the love of god, don´t turn your base kagune into some bullshit supernatural thing like the kakuja examples you put out above, just give it a certain form and that´s all it needs... nothing else.)

If you want an oc, just keep it simple. Overpowering it like you did above will just make readers bored and ditch it faster then a dirty rag.

Keep it simple... and realistic. Remember what kind of world Tokyo Ghoul is... and you should be fine.

This was a firendly advice from one author who KNOWS how to write characters for a story and OC´s in particular.

Nobody likes a mary sue/stue...nobody.