Thread:Ahendra/@comment-24494906-20160115202553/@comment-10733658-20160120094606

Examples:

''Instead of continuing to fight, Kaneki says he did not want to eat those investigators and decided to runs away. After he successfully escaped them and accidentaly stabbed Banjou with his, Kaneki finally calms down, with his kakuja mask falling off his face.''

The above mixes tenses, is missing a word, and reads in a fairly awkward manner.

''Donato usually offering insight and advice to Kaneki on his investigations. Donato uses his personal name when addressing him implying they have a cordial relationship. Donato seems to know certain informations that Kaneki does not know, which could lead Kaneki to uncover his memories. Donato treats him more friendlier than other investigators who come for his aid.''

The above mixes tenses, is grammatically incorrect, and reads in a very awkward manner. Every sentence starts with "Donato", which is incredibly repetitive.

See what I mean about issues with the edits? Obviously, there are others since Old McDonald felt the need to speak to you about it.