Thread:Ahendra/@comment-24494906-20160115202553/@comment-16729840-20160120102829

Harostar wrote: Examples:

''Instead of continuing to fight, Kaneki says he did not want to eat those investigators and decided to runs away. After he successfully escaped them and accidentaly stabbed Banjou with his, Kaneki finally calms down, with his kakuja mask falling off his face.''

The above mixes tenses, is missing a word, and reads in a fairly awkward manner.

''Donato usually offering insight and advice to Kaneki on his investigations. Donato uses his personal name when addressing him implying they have a cordial relationship. Donato seems to know certain informations that Kaneki does not know, which could lead Kaneki to uncover his memories. Donato treats him more friendlier than other investigators who come for his aid.''

The above mixes tenses, is grammatically incorrect, and reads in a very awkward manner. Every sentence starts with "Donato", which is incredibly repetitive.

See what I mean about issues with the edits? Obviously, there are others since Old McDonald felt the need to speak to you about it. great, i appreciate the start of evaluation. accidentaly stabbed Banjou with his The missing one was from original editor, which my bad did not notice and fixing it

compare to the original one, (not from Gonza since he did not add anything in that section) http://tokyoghoul.wikia.com/index.php?title=Ken_Kaneki&diff=215690&oldid=215689 it was not News Style and not summarizing the article. instead it looks like Novel booklines. that is why i said it would be appreciated to fix the grammar that parts after my edits since im still prone to broken grammar

''Donato usually offering insight and advice to Kaneki on his investigations. Donato uses his personal name when addressing him implying they have a cordial relationship. Donato seems to know certain informations that Kaneki does not know, which could lead Kaneki to uncover his memories. Donato treats him more friendlier than other investigators who come for his aid.''

The above mixes tenses, is grammatically incorrect, and reads in a very awkward manner. Every sentence starts with "Donato", which is incredibly repetitive.

Now ive saw this case. if we saw source before being edited. the highlighted revision was not from my edit my edits

as you can compared with the state before mcDonald 'undo' my latest edit http://tokyoghoul.wikia.com/index.php?title=Ken_Kaneki&diff=212274&oldid=211643#Donato_Porpora

with the state of paragraph even before my original edit of Donato section http://tokyoghoul.wikia.com/index.php?title=Ken_Kaneki&diff=211660&oldid=211643

i dont know why mcDonald attributed the fault of the line to me?

it was even existed even before Chilopoda(who preceding my edit).