Talk:Hinami Fueguchi/@comment-26146658-20150616044745/@comment-213.66.199.45-20150616050930

You want constructive criticism?

(Deep inhale... "Oh here. we. go...")

Kaneki is a bit too short.

The heads are a bit too big.

Arms on both too short.

Need work on the hands...

...So does the faces.

It feels flat..."2-D" so to say.

I understand the "OTP" part, but ask yourself, is a kiss really the best way to show it? There´s other actions that´s just as powerful and more subtle then that.

Well, I would advice you to find a "how to draw manga" art-book, go through the praction examples until you get the concepts into your fingers and mind, and then try to draw this scene again with that knowledge guiding you.

(Trust me on this, I´m also an artwork artist that draws on my spare time... Here´s an example of my artworks in terms of Tokyo Ghoul... So don´t think that I´m someone that doesn´t know what I´m talking about.)

So my advice... is for you to take your time, get some "how-to-draw" book and practice your way up for another attempt with this "OTP" as you want to show us.

(Don´t take this the wrong way, as you did ask for constructive criticism... and here you got it.)